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Posted by Sul, 10:44, 28th February 2003:
 
I'm not a great lyricist but I decided to pen a song on my way to work this morning. It may need a bit more work but I'm quite proud of it.

I call it "See You Next Tuesday Mario!"


Ive got 5 toes on my left foot baby
Ive got 5 toes on my right foot too
Thats 10 digits all together darling
But all I can think of is you

Ive an internal skeletal structure
And a maze of ateries and veins
Ive all these internal organs honey
But none of them are causing this pain

(chorus)
Its you you bitch
You left me with an itch
Im developing a twitch
Since you felt the need to ditch me... for that italian cunt.

Theres thousands of tiny nerve endings
Stretching throughout my fingers
But its my brain that you fucked up babe
Thats where the memory still lingers

(chorus)
Its you you bitch
You left me with an itch
Im developing a twitch
Since you felt the need to ditch me... for that italian cunt.
Posted by Victor Menendez, 10:45, 28th February 2003:
 
I like it, how does the tune go?
Posted by Foghorn Leghorn, 10:46, 28th February 2003:
 
Love it!

Apart from the 'italian cunt' part.
Posted by beargod, 10:47, 28th February 2003:
 
Its very good, make a single in mp3 fomat and post it up here
Posted by Victor Menendez, 10:47, 28th February 2003:
 
The chorus needs some work though

Its you you bitch
You left me with an itch
Im developing a twitch
Since you felt the need to ditch me... for that italian cunt.

The 'me' in the last line doesn't scan properly with the rest, read it out loud and notice that it sounds out of place, i suggest.

'Since you left me in the ditch..... for that italian cunt.'
Posted by beargod, 10:49, 28th February 2003:
 
yeah, I agree
Posted by Sul, 10:51, 28th February 2003:
 
Its not out of place in my head. The ditch part lingers. Like da da da da da da daaaaaaaaaaaaa da (beat) da da da da da da da

if that makes sense

FL: Whats wrong with the italian cunt bit? If you makes you feel any better he is.
Posted by Foghorn Leghorn, 10:53, 28th February 2003:
 
oh well, thats ok then. I feel much better now.
Posted by Victor Menendez, 10:55, 28th February 2003:
 
Not convinced, what tune do we sing it to? tots tv again?
Posted by Sul, 10:57, 28th February 2003:
 
its my own tune from my own head.
Doesnt really help does it?

I'll have a think of how I can convey it in text.
Posted by chandler, 11:07, 28th February 2003:
 
sing it, mp3 it and post it
Posted by Rosie, 11:17, 28th February 2003:
 
I've wrote a song.....its called...

YOU LOT ARE USING ME.

your a freaking alcoholic
go get a job, you lazy son-of-a-bitch
i'm not your slave
and I haven't got money coming out of my arsehole.

chorus
My flatmates are freaking users
they are freaking leaches
No one will be happy till I'm dead and buried.
You lot can't even leave me to do my studies
coz I have to listen to you lot moaning and groaning.


I've got to get a second job
to pay the rent and for your cider and fags
to pay for everyone elses food and shit-roll
I freaking hate my life.

the end

Its not quite finished yet, so obviously its a bit rough around the edges....
Posted by Sul, 11:19, 28th February 2003:
 
I feel I'm gonna get pipped to the top spot by that rocky little number
Posted by chandler, 11:20, 28th February 2003:
 
you're a freaking alcoholic
not "your"
Posted by chandler, 11:20, 28th February 2003:
 
(I'm only correcting your spelling cos I know it turns Redmaiden on.)
Posted by Rosie, 11:21, 28th February 2003:
 
as i said, it's a bit of a rough draft
Posted by chandler, 11:24, 28th February 2003:
 
Is a stiff breeze the same as a rough draught?
Posted by beargod, 11:24, 28th February 2003:
 
Rosie, ill give you Chandlers address and a gun.. the rest writes itself
Posted by Rosie, 11:30, 28th February 2003:
 
Chay is being a bit picky today, isn't he!

:)
Posted by Rosie, 11:30, 28th February 2003:
 
I'll let him off - coz he looks fit in his photo...
Posted by ilovebeerme, 11:32, 28th February 2003:
 
Rosie: Leave and start having fun. Seriously.
Posted by chandler, 11:33, 28th February 2003:
 
As I said, I was only being picky cos Redmaiden likes it
Posted by beargod, 11:34, 28th February 2003:
 
And find a good looking bloke too
Posted by Victor Menendez, 11:39, 28th February 2003:
 
Whats happening on the Vic & Sul + Little and large sisters front rosie?
Posted by Rosie, 11:40, 28th February 2003:
 
Oh! I forgot about that! I am seeing them at the weekend so will ask them what they think.
Posted by Victor Menendez, 11:43, 28th February 2003:
 
Dont forget how rich and good looking we are, check our photos.
Posted by Rosie, 11:55, 28th February 2003:
 
Vic, your photo is gonna give me nightmares...
Posted by November Eclectica, 14:28, 28th February 2003:
 
me to .... ugh!
Posted by chandler, 14:29, 28th February 2003:
 
"too" not "to"


Sorry, I won't do it again.
Posted by Victor Menendez, 14:32, 28th February 2003:
 
got a problem with the way i look nov?
Posted by November Eclectica, 14:38, 28th February 2003:
 
That isn't really you.
Posted by Victor Menendez, 14:41, 28th February 2003:
 
Ask sul, he was very complimentary about my mustache. unlike some shallow people around here *Sniff*
Posted by November Eclectica, 15:00, 28th February 2003:
 
Well at least i didn't say it would give mi nightmares .. rosie did.

I still don't think that it you and it would take you forever to get me believe that it was you.
Posted by beargod, 15:04, 28th February 2003:
 
especially as it looks like one pic stuck to another
Posted by Victor Menendez, 15:14, 28th February 2003:
 
ooh, well spotted. hadn't noticed that.